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Girls’ Last Tour Volume 2 (Manga Review, Spoilers) - NerdSpan

Girls’ Last Tour Volume 2 in many ways parallels the structure of Vol 1, with about a hundred pages packed with pratfalls and their more existential tumbles

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tazmeah30d ago

Constructive criticism: That was a hard read. I felt like you were a doctor writing a letter to another doctor. I didn't feel like you were writing to me, as I had to define two words. And I stopped after 3 paragraphs.

I copy/pasted your text into a readability tool, and it recommended using shorter sentences and smaller words.